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Post by James Joseph Page. on Oct 17, 2014 0:51:27 GMT -5
Got my RP up and hoped everyone saw how Jimmy Page has seriously fucked commitment issues. Really enjoyed this writing this and wanted to know what people thought. So please, tear my self esteem apart and then toss me in a garbage can and call me a NERD because I can't write cool guy RPs like you all. |:
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Chris Q
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Post by Chris Q on Oct 17, 2014 5:29:07 GMT -5
I've always tried to imagine how things would play out in a Chris Q vs. Jimmy Page match. After reading this latest piece, I am now convinced that I'd get lit up against you. I'm not judging/scoring your match for this event, but I'd put that RP in my top three of all time.
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Cordy
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Post by Cordy on Oct 17, 2014 16:37:29 GMT -5
Absolutely loved it man. You did an amazing job conveying the source of Page's issues in terms of commitment/relationships/the opposite sex. I definitely enjoyed it and as you already know I'm a huge fan of the Page character in general lol.
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Post by LΞCAVALIΞR on Oct 18, 2014 7:40:11 GMT -5
No intros. Let's just get into it shall we.
Things I think worked well:
-The Feels: Most of us by now have a pretty decent grasp of the Jimmy Page character; we know he's terrible and bad and stuff. But, these CD sections explain why. In literature, the best villains have reasons and justifications for them becoming evil. In the past, you've given us glimpses, but this one was full and complete. Your CD sections were able to touch and pull the reader in; for me, it was the Sally sections. I don't know about anyone else, but I was in my feelings for a bit after reading everything, and that's what you want right.
-Stealing Cordy's Purple: Actually, I knew this RP was going to be problem when I saw that you were using Cordy's coding-color lol. I can't explain to you in words what it did, but its effect was great (on me at least).
-That picture: Similar to the coding-color.
-The total package: RP as a whole had a nice effect on the reader. It was long (yeah, I know I can't talk), but I didn't even care; I was just along for the crazy ride.
Things I thought didn't work/could be improved:
-Quick shoot: I'm not sure if this is a real criticism, but I'll list it here anyway. After reading what happened with Sally, I was expecting a long, emotional soot on Cordy; but instead, it was pretty short and sweet. That's not a bad thing, just wasn't expecting it.
Well, that's all I've got sir. Peace out.
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Post by pimp on Oct 18, 2014 10:16:02 GMT -5
I really enjoyed how the current situation flowed right into the back story. It gave me a lot of insight on the character because..welp I despised Jimmy Page before reading this. >_> Afterwards, I feel for the guy. Just when I was completely on his side, he tossed the woman out in nothing but a sheet lmfao I have mixed emotions for the character as a whole now.
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Post by James Joseph Page. on Feb 26, 2015 12:28:46 GMT -5
Alright guys, after working on this practically at 6 a.m. here is my RP "Strings". Tell me what's up. |: Hurt my feelings, crush my pride, tell me my feet smell. HURT ME MORE SNAKE!!! D:< |
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