Vinny
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Post by Vinny on May 11, 2012 18:00:51 GMT -5
I decided to try something different this week with Fallon. I wanted to explore more of him coming unhinged outside of the ring, and not just in the ring. Sort of try to display that he's not just an asshole, he's actually a dangerous and disturbed person. At the same time, I wanted to humanize him a bit through his own delusions. There's a paragraph in there that cuts to the hurt of why Fallon is so angry and my hope was that while it showed that he's completely out of his mind, he still thinks he doing the right thing. I wanted to know if that actually came across or if I'm the delusional one.  Feedback would be great. Link to the RP is here. |
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Post by Chandler Scott on May 12, 2012 9:17:17 GMT -5
I know you hate feedback where it's basically people telling you that you did a good job. But, you did a good job. I personally would've liked to have seen some banter between you and possibly a Librarian trying to "shhhh" you. But that's a minor nitpick.
The best heels are those that are convinced that what they're doing is right. And I think that Fallon has done a good job of explaining why he is the way he is/why he's done the thing he has. Bling was the big Frontier signing, complete with that Breaking News thing. I remembered in one of your other rps you basically said that what Bling has should be yours. So what do you do? You injure him.
You beat Micky O'Reilly. Yet you have to "share" your number one contenderhsip with him. So at the supershow, you've vowed to snap his arm, too.
And then the new guy, Shields. You talked about having to work your way up the card. But Shields gets immediately bumped into what I guess is the co-main event. So what do you vow to do? Injure the soccer stars legs.
I think it's becoming more increasingly clear why FGA was the only place, kayfabe-wise, that would take a flier on Fallon. Also, you've done a good job over the past few of not only just being a smart ass, but conveying the message of someone that is legitimately dangerous to those around him.
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Vinny
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Post by Vinny on May 13, 2012 21:38:19 GMT -5
I know you hate feedback where it's basically people telling you that you did a good job. But, you did a good job. Hearing that don't suck from time to time is nice, too. ;D Thanks for the feedback. |
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Post by Deleted on May 22, 2012 16:39:42 GMT -5
Bit late, but my sentiments are largely the same as Bryce. You have conveyed your frustrations admirably, built Fallon up to be the asshole with a purpose/reason and you even made me laugh doing it. As a criticism, you need more cowbell.
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