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Post by Stephen on Jan 17, 2012 20:59:26 GMT -5
It's in the Cards Baby.Yeah, wrote this super last minute. Didn't even spell check it cause the time you see it posted is exactly the time that I finished it. Not anything like I'd originally planned it to be, but at least it's up. Regardless, even last minute stuff shows some indication of what a person can do so I'd like to hear what you all think.
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Post by The Rogue on Jan 18, 2012 3:17:34 GMT -5
I liked it. Very well written. Different too. But one criticism. Michael Tomkins beat Scott Reave.  |
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Post by Stephen on Jan 18, 2012 11:17:46 GMT -5
Thanks man.
Sorry about that mistake on you vs Reave >> I was reading the shows, past rps, and doing research on the tarot cards while writing this and some things just went over my head.
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Post by The Rogue on Jan 18, 2012 17:11:19 GMT -5
Haha no worries. But yeah, I think its the rp i enjoyed most this week. No offence to anyone else :/
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Post by Deleted on Jan 18, 2012 18:24:33 GMT -5
Ouch...
I'll read later and feed you.
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Post by Adam James on Jan 19, 2012 11:50:27 GMT -5
Ditto Ben's statement. I have fallen behind on feeding people.
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Post by Adam James on Jan 19, 2012 19:12:06 GMT -5
From a personal standpoint, I was not overly enthralled with the RP. It was different, you have that correct Kyle, but it did not really do much for me. To better explain myself, I prefer shoots to have some fact or logic behind them... and the concept of the tarot cards just went too over the top for my liking.
As for the writing itself? It was really well written, no worries there. I can tell it is a bit rushed, which is why I don't want to be too harsh at all. I look forward to what you can do for this upcoming supershow.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 23, 2012 14:07:36 GMT -5
PRO: Well written.
CON: The colours hurt my eyes. Not a lot of character development.
PRO: You can build on it.
Yeah, I don't like giving feedback ;D
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Post by Stephen on Jan 23, 2012 15:23:45 GMT -5
@jj: I understand where you're coming from on the tarot cards, but I like to relate my promos to the CD part of my rps to make it flow better. Thanks for the compliment about the writing of it, and I'll hopefully have my SS rp up either tonight or tomorrow.
@blaine: You've helped more than you know. I actually hate coloring rps, but all white text just irks the hell out of me. Thanks for the compliment, and I have plans on building on the little CD I did have. I'm probably going to spend the next few weeks introducing his personality to FGA before I actually start to develop him dramatically.
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