"Making a start" feedback

[Micky O'Reilly]

It's just a character development and I wrote it late last night, hopefully got rid of all the spelling grammatical errors this morning.
It's my first venture into eFedding and want to do a couple of backgrounds before I compete to try to build my ability so any feedback would be much appreciated guys.
Cheers

[The Rogue]

It was a good start. Gives good insight to the character and how he thinks. I'd say possibly more descriptions. Not necessarily going into amazing details on what a whiskey bottle looks like, but just on how he's acting or thinking or such. Also try to avoid too many sentences starting with "he." You only done it a bit, but just be careful. But like I said, a good start. Keep it up

[Micky O'Reilly]

Cheers man, gonna start my next character building tonight or tomorrow so I will take that on board and hopefully get something better up, start writing from a first person perspective as opposed to third