Feed a styg back?

[styg]

I wanted to make some pun on stickleback or sticklebrick there, but it wasn't coming. :/

(Boom phrasing et cetera.)

So aye three different roleplays for three different characters in the last week, and hopefully they're all pretty different to each other.



Let's Light It Up!
Because <3 AJ Lee's entrance music!

I think strictly speaking this is the first actual match roleplay I've ever done for Ligaya. I've only had her in HKW and DWA before this. Any general feedback on her would be very appreciated. Two things in particular I'd really like feedback on though -

1) The balance of her stoner gimmick. Most of my characters smoke weed (they say write what you know lol) but it's not at all a big thing for most of them. With Ligaya I'm trying to make it a lot more central to her identity without it overwhelming her. I don't like doing "wrestling gimmicks" where everything the character says and does is tied to this one personality trait; I want her to be more like that friend everyone has where the first thing people would describe about them is that they're a huge stoner, but it wouldn't be the only thing.

2) The way she talks. She's meant to be spacey as hell - that's what the "D-Bree" stuff was about. She took in that Donovan was her opponent, and when it got changed, she had trouble remembering that so she kept getting their names mixed up. I'm not sure how clearly it came across that that's why she was doing that. Beyond that I'm trying to get a certain way of talking with her that's not quite there yet, with her having a mishmash of all different subcultures' slang and stuff, plus a bit of her own random shit she's just made up. The idea being that she soaks up aspects of all the different circles she runs in like a sponge. Any thoughts on how to blend it all together better would be welcome.



Sick.
And this is what Laurel's up to. Pretty obviously, I've been in a bad mood with fedding lately and the rapid successive departures of The Black Hand and The Infinite Empire are possibly the largest reason why (no ill will to the handlers; it's just how things shake out). All of Laurel's direction vanished with them, and I felt (and still kinda do) like I'm stuck with the choice of turning her full heel, which I really don't want to do, or just retconning and pulling her back to full face, which I want to do even less. This piece was primarily trying to work some of that out from a character standpoint, trying to see how doable the tweener thing is with her right now. So on top of any general feedback on it anyone might be kind enough to give me, I'm curious to see how tweenery this came off, as opposed to straight face or straight heel.

BTW, to the people, titles and companies she took shots at in the piece, I want you to know it's all IC. I <3 u all.



Personal Issues
Obviously my focus this week. Couple things to say. The old promos against Sebastian and mara are based on the actual roleplays I started writing for those matches, but they got heavily rewritten and fleshed out because I felt that would be a good way to chronicle her journey since we last saw her speak. I don't... THINK you need to follow EXODUS to take away the important bits from the mara and fourway promos? I don't think being familiar with the angles referenced actually matters. If I'm wrong there, please correct me.

The bouncing around in time thing... it felt like this was the way the information reveal made most sense, and again, I didn't think preserving the right chronological order actually brought anything worthwhile in this instance.

There's a lot of stuff I do which I wonder how clearly it comes across that it's intentional. Like, in this piece, her deciding she had nothing to use from the old promos and then leaning on them heavily for her post about Mirage. I did that on purpose to show how Leanne's introversion/introspection lacks clarity but I don't know if it actually comes through or not. Similarly, not actually really showing the specifics of her transition from "this is my last chance and I won't fail" to "I'm just running out my career". Like... I feel like it should be obvious without being explicitly said, but is it? :S

Also - Wlad, is he any good? I haven't used much of either him or Jem, the two non-wrestling-related people in the Dragons' household, and I'd like to start developing them a bit more I think.



Thankeeees xxx

[Laura Perelli]

Ligaya: I'll be honest, I dread the stoner subculture character base, so I'm slightly biased against the character just from that. BUT...I'll try to put that aside and critique. It being central to her identity is kinda interesting, though, I just dunno if I'd make it THAT trait. You know what I mean by that.

I think the best way to adapt her way of speaking is gonna end up being trail and error, honestly. Each promo, find what works, hang on to that, see what does and try to adapt other words in. I couldn't point to a single phrase and go "nuh uh, that one's no good," or "you should replace XYZ with ABC instead," I think it's gonna be one'a those that evolves with time. Getting the opponent's names mixed up was maybe a bit TOO clever, I had to read it 2 or 3 times to get what you were going for, but I liked it as a promo tactic.

Laurel: Of the three, this was probably my favourite piece overall. It really got across Laurel's overall frustration, and I liked the fact that she didn't focus on just FGA stuff, or that it wasn't fed-centric that she was frustrated. I loved the line "I just want to wrestle, and wrestling keeps getting in the way." As to the tweener-y stuff, I think the fact that she sorta holds nothing sacred at the moment (wrestling-wise) puts her outside the typical face/heel dichotomy, which is kinda where I feel like Laurel belongs anyway.

Leanne: This one, I'ma do a bit-by-bit kinda analysis, cuz I think each part is it's own lil...eco-system, for lack of better word.

Flashbacks: I did like the fact that these were things Leanne never posted, but still leans on. I didn't pick up on it the first time I read through it, but the second time, I caught bits and pieces of each influence. "I've fought you a thousand times, and I'll fight you a thousand more" was probably my favourite adaptation from the past blogs into the Mirage promo.

Liverpool: The idea that there's a particular place that sorta 'energizes' her was interesting. "Personal Issues" is a great way to explain away what's going on in her head. Not a whole lot to critique in this particular part, but seeing what's going on in Leanne's head lately was nice.

Wlad/Leanne: Probably my favourite of the scenes in the RP, mostly because it's a mix of getting a feel for Leanne's home life, mindset, and her own personal frustrations with wrestling. I liked Wlad as a sorta straight man to play everything off of (at least, that's what he seemed like to me), I'd be curious to see what you do with him.

Promo: Sorta combining feedback with the flashbacks, I liked the use of some of the material from the blogs she didn't post.

Overall, I haven't seen a lot of Leanne lately, so I'm glad to see her up and about again.

[Noelle Smith]

When I get time, which won't be until after the 23rd because gdi spring break is a nightmare for parents, I will do proper feedback but until then:
Keep Wlad. This side character had more junk in the trunk than some people's main so yes, keep him.

[styg]

Thanks, much appreciated!