Graham/Tillman

[Top Tier Terry]

So here's the thing. I haven't really had the chance to really RP anything major since I'm literally starting this week. But I have put a couple things out there just to get my feet wet again (remember the last time I was in an e-fed was during the Monday Night Wars lol) So I just wanted to see what everyone's opinion is so far. Graham is my classic character so I'm more comfortable with him. Tillman however is new to me. I'm going for the bright eyed rookie type and trying to be a little humorous with it I want him to be a lighter character and since I haven't fleshed him out, I put him in LD.

If you guys could just give me some initial reactions I would appreciate it a great deal. I'm trying to build my way up to these epic RP's I'm reading from you guys lol 

[Dan Herrera]

I've enjoyed your Triple T RPs so far. His cousin had me laughing. He's a good comic relief for sure. One thing I may suggest, add a bit more shoot on your opponent to your RPs. Not a big deal, like I said, good stuff so far, but do that and I think they'll improve that much more.

Additionally, I know it's hard to add anything when you have 600 words to work with, but that's one of the things that makes it fun in my opinion. =)

[Deleted]

To add to what Dan stated, I'd also work on adding a more description to the scene and setting. I'd also add more length to it. With what Dan said and my little suggestion you'd be golden.