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Post by Ashley Sands on Jul 25, 2014 9:24:48 GMT -5
So I've got a few rp's under my belt finally. Just want to see what people think. Before bringing her to FGA, I only wrote one rp for Ash but think I'm slowly getting her down with all the little quirks she's got and character.
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Post by Ashley Sands on Dec 18, 2014 8:16:13 GMT -5
Just want to get thoughts from anyone that wants to feed me. Especially Benny since I was a little apprehensive about writing Annie and doing it right. I've written Fel a few times now and Paulley's like what I've done so far to show that relationship but Annie's a whole other story. I have this fear of failure and looking like a complete jackass when I screw up on something lije this.
Going back to last year, I always saw the Descent team as kind of like the Bellas meet D'S. Throw Annie in the mix with them and they were kind of like the clique of fedding only they're girls and hope I pulled that off here.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 24, 2014 21:51:57 GMT -5
You wrote Annie well enough for the first time; there was one little issue I could nag about, but it's hardly worth it. Both your character development and your promo parts for your Final Frontier were much better than in recent weeks as well. You seemed to be - in my opinion - falling into the trap where the character development was filler that did nothing to develop Ashley as either a person or a wrestler. She was dealing with petty issues arising in her year long relationship and did nothing. And when doing your promos, there have been times when I as a wrestling fan would not be behind Ashley. Particularly that one against IE. You no sold your opponents, you verbally trashed a team you failed to secure a pinfall victory over in a tag team contest and then YOU NO SOLD YOUR OPPONENTS YET AGAIN! Your last rp was a vast improvement, however so whatever you decided to do when writing that one, keep doing it. Sell the match, sell your opponent and make the fans want to see the match. And I'm not sure if you have Ashley as the fearless type, but if you're up against a monster opponent or an invading group please don't laugh in their face. Or I'll want to turn into Jim Cornette and you can be Santino. Sorry. Pet peeve.  |
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Post by Ashley Sands on Dec 25, 2014 3:14:13 GMT -5
Lol yeah. That's one thing about Ash. It's not necessarily about not l ok king someone but if she has 0 respect for them, she's just going to no sell and downplay the shit out of them. You can see the same kind of deal whenever her and Tony have words. He passes her off as nothing and she gives it right back.
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Post by Ashley Sands on Jan 15, 2015 3:44:03 GMT -5
This rp was something different as far as Ashley rp's go. One thing I really wanted to illustrate is that difference from the public Ashley that everyone sees as this crazy bitch that can be immature at times and all how it's different from the private Ashley that only a select few get to see. If she really was like how she is on tv all the time, you have to ask yourself just how Colton puts up with that and why he's with her. Well because it's not her honestly. It's that public mask to keep people from seeing just how vulnerable and exposed she really feels sometimes.
Her youth has something to do with that too and, for awhile now, I've been working on showing she's been growing up and maturing. There's the Ashley when she first started wrestling, the Ashley that she's become over the past year or so and what she's evolving into now which is more of a mix between the two. It'll pretty much wrap itself up in March or so when she hits twenty years old.
So the thing with IE was pretty good timing to spur her on in that growth. I needed a cause or something for her to get behind and this is it. With this one, I wanted to show just how much the good vs. bad dynamic just really confused the shit out of her. Really the general idea of evil in general confused her and it never was something she really understood. Like the memorial service for her aunt, Erin's mother. I was iffy about writing this, wrapping my head around writing about 9/11 from the perspective of a six year old Ashley and doing it right was one of those things that was pretty damn daunting. But it was the perfect example to illustrate it. Before then, she was pretty much shielded from the world. So the idea of death and the consequences of it were really strange for her and she couldn't get anywhere close to understanding it. Before that, her experience about bad shit was from tv where shit happens but it all works out and everyone's happy in the end. Kind of like how she completely dismissed IE and just had the attitude of "this too shall pass."
If anyone wants to tell me how I did with this one, feel free. This one was something I really wanted to do right.
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Post by LΞCAVALIΞR on Jan 15, 2015 9:18:14 GMT -5
I thought your RP was really good, perhaps even one of the best of have written here. One thing you do well is making the audience feel Ashley's emotion; and, this RP was no different. To me, your shoot was straight and to the point. Honestly, I don't have any complaints or concerns with this one; you did a very good sorry,
And sorry this isn't my usual robust Owens feedback critique; tis' been a long day already.
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Post by Ashley Sands on Jan 16, 2015 13:52:12 GMT -5
I thought your RP was really good, perhaps even one of the best of have written here. Quite the high level to have up there with but thank you, sir. |
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