Make Your Mind Up Feedback

[Chandler Scott]

Make Your Mind Up

I've never asked for feedback before. But I just rattled off this roleplay now and it's the first time that I've extensively used dialogue. So I was wondering what you thought. Any tips would be appreciated.

[Alexia Brandt]

I'll put it to you this way: I was really proud of my RP until I read yours. You've got three awesome characters, each with their own personality that your CD piece captured nicely, and your writing style is both informative and hilarious. The idea of Chandler playing at being some bond villain mastermind and Alexia stymying him by not playing along not only made me laugh, but made me as a handler feel really proud of myself. It takes an awesome writer to put someone over like that while still making their own character relevant, and you did so seemingly effortlessly.

Now for the shoot itself, I've expressed on multiple occasions my distaste for response promos, but I'll gladly make an exception for this one; this wasn't you just taking each paragraph and writing a rebuttal, you took a few salient points and let them feed into the rest of the promo instead of having them BE the promo. I think one of the things I like best about Chandler as a character is that no matter how many accurate observations he makes, you've written him to be such a smug shitheel that it comes off as delusional BS which only feeds my desire to watch him eventually get his comeuppance.

I think if there's any criticism I can make, it's that the match itself didn't get a lot of focus. This was a promo built around the development of the storyline and the fact that Alexia and Chandler are facing each other on Sunday is almost an afterthought. This isn't much of a criticism though, as my own promo had something very similar. The truth is this match is just an excuse for the two of us to get over the FGA/FRONTIER storyline with something besides Twitter, and I've certainly enjoyed the opportunity. Good luck for Sunday, although I suspect I'll need it more