The Rogue
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Post by The Rogue on Apr 19, 2013 1:50:11 GMT -5
Basically, Tomkins is back. Going in a new direction with him. Edgy, new and slightly nonsensical.
Thanks guys.
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Post by The Rogue on May 14, 2013 10:16:51 GMT -5
Feedback for 13-0... technically. Let me know what you think  |
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Post by Deleted on May 22, 2013 15:30:11 GMT -5
Is This Thing On?
First question when reading is: has Tomkins gone insane? I don't know what to say except it lacks any and all relevance to the modern landscape of FGA. Lets see if you can move on from that to an opponent likely to appear in an FGA ring again anytime soon...
13-0 Technically
That is not irony.
To start you better develop the angle I presume you're going for. Bitter and twisted over a perceived personal slight, am I right? I never realised Blaine/Ben had so much merchandise though lol
Well described and the actions of the Tomkins character are enough to draw you in. He's delusional but he's a believable delusional weirdo.
Ah, match discussion. The reasoning behind why they've been attacking Cami is good, well written and makes sense. It's not as random as first perceived, which is always a bonus. You were always a good cocky character, which works better as a heel.
Keep it up.
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Post by Jensen Banks on May 25, 2013 10:59:58 GMT -5
The mention of Cerberus made me smile. After reading this, I can only tell that Tomkins has gone insane. Very well written.
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The Rogue
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Post by The Rogue on Jun 7, 2013 17:53:43 GMT -5
Lumberjack bump. I wasn't as happy with this as I didn't have time and am still trying to recover and a bit medicated so I know it is far from my best. Any feedback would be appreciated.
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