K-Hard Feedback

[Kevin Hardaway]

Yeah, sorry for having a crappy intro RP but I've never been good with intro RP's in my entire life, so it happens.

New one is up though, and it's a lot more interesting. For those who don't know, K-Hard's wife, Angie died of cancer in 2010. Funny, because for the shortest time, after an RP from one of my old friends came out, he thought that I was always full of shit, and that the Angie character was always alive. So honestly, I thought about doing it.

Then the whole Manti Te'o insanity came out.

So I went against it, and decided to come up with one of those "real or fake?" type stories. That the injuries caused to Hardaway over the years (most notably now the Gordon Jr. headbutt) has pretty much turned a switch off in his brain. IC wise, Hardaway believes he's fine, but who the fuck knows.

So there's that.

[thelion]

Well it's definitely a different approach on the traditional promo. Center formatted with a poetic license. Not exactly my cup of tea, but it's well presented and written. I just wish you painted a scene for us. Described some backgrounds, the characters involved, and put some physical interaction to go with these great words man.

I do like the head injury approach though. It does add a nice wrinkle to the character and makes him a bit more interesting. I say go with it, but try to paint a scene for us beyond verbal exposition.

That's just my opinion though. I've always tried to cut things on a "As you see it" basis and I hope you don't take my few criticisms in a bad way. It's still good and the words and emotionality tied to them are fairly strong even without reading the character's body language and facial expressions.

[thelion]

Just Read - Versus the World, Versus the Universe

Dude, awesome RP and thank my lucky stars I'm not up against you! LoL. My shit looks weak in comparison.

You told a story, though I'm not sure how it has anything to do with the match except the part where you talk about Harter and Drake's attack. Aside from that, though, I just read that and went "Wow.... That was intense." Damn Good job bro.