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How did I do?

[thelion]

You won! I'd say you did pretty damn good! LoL.

Actually, your material was pretty good man. I'm also a Pulp Fiction fan and Sam Jackson's bible quote was one of my all time favorite lines in movie cinema. Depending on how you take it, it's definitely a great mind screw when used just right.

Could have done with a little less referencing of reality TV though. In some circles, that might even shoot you in the foot.

If I have any advice it's that you really need to break up the large blocks of dialogue with some gestures and actions. I read that RP and was like "A.J. has to stop and breath doesn't he?" LoL.

But all I have to say is that Fairchild's still holding the belt, so you it worked. Congrats! *Salute n' stuff*

I like the victim of circumstance angle going on though. Preston Blake charged to do some damage, Vikki Synn stops him. AJ goes to nail him, he ducks, down she goes like the Titanic. Preston escapes, leaving AJ to soak up the blame.

Good times are a comin'!