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Post by Deleted on Nov 15, 2012 10:15:39 GMT -5
So how did I do?
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Post by Deleted on Nov 15, 2012 10:34:36 GMT -5
All I can say is... sucks to be Terry right now lol. It would be a pain in the ass to judge yours and Chandler's RPs. You both did great and I think the title match will be one for the ages. Great job man.
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Post by Chris Q on Nov 15, 2012 11:53:39 GMT -5
Pretty solid overall. It is a little strange how sometimes when AJ speaks he sounds like a normal guy and other times he's a philosophy professor. His character just doesn't seem consistent throughout the entire rp. I felt like you had great passion in your writing and you did a great job building this match.
The only other criticism I would give you is that in the first four paragraphs (the intro), because you are writing in past-tense, some of the phrasing sounds really awkward and some of the writing is a little hard to get through.
Enjoyed the read. Nice work.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 15, 2012 16:03:04 GMT -5
Well the character 100% is based off of me, and I do revert from a near low I.Q. man child, to a deep thinker on an hourly basis... Meh, but thanks anyway. I just want to portray A.J. an intellectual who is deeply inspired by Nietzsche styled philosophy.
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