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Post by Stephen on Nov 15, 2012 2:54:53 GMT -5
I'll be using this thread for feedback for my roleplays. Spark NotesAny and all feedback is welcome. |
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Chris Q
Headliner
The Big Bad of FGA
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Post by Chris Q on Nov 15, 2012 19:19:15 GMT -5
I enjoyed reading this. I like what you did in the beginning with the voicemail and texting portion, I haven't seen that done a lot and thought it was something different. I like the little "road to redemption" that you have Mercier on here, trying to get his spot back. I think you could have done a little more in trying to explain how things are going to be different and how this run will not end like Mercier's last, but I'm sure that will be something you'll continue to write about...
I really like this character. Chris Q needs a good bud hook up in FGA...maybe you can hook him up?
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Post by Stephen on Nov 15, 2012 21:35:18 GMT -5
Thanks man. I actually had an entirely different roleplay in mind and drafted out before I sat down and wrote this that explained Jacques' plan. But as I began writing it, I honestly just didn't like it so I decided to just start over completely and this is what popped out haha. I'm sure I can help you out with your bud problem though, keep an eye on your PMs.
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