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Post by Deleted on Oct 17, 2012 21:32:47 GMT -5
Hey, Just looking for some feedback on "Jack's Back" and "Pain in the Ass" Roleplays, and overall my character so far for Jack Owyns. Just a heads up, I haven't been apart of a roleplay feds for many many years, and really haven't written anything in a few years. Still trying to shake the cob webs lol. So any feedback that can help me improve, would be much appreciated. Don't worry my feelings can not be hurt lol.
Cheers,
-Trevor
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Post by Deleted on Oct 17, 2012 22:30:01 GMT -5
I thought the first piece "Jack's Back" was a good introductory piece. I'd say you could have addressed your opponents more but at that point the three of you were all pretty new to the fold, and more importantly, each other.
The second one, "Pain in the Ass," had good interaction with Jack and the kid. Jack did a good job coming off as heel, but I think at that point both of your opponents had written an RP each and could have been addressed more. All in all not bad and a pretty good way to shake off years of RP rust.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 17, 2012 22:30:51 GMT -5
In addition I'm a fan of Jack Owyns and I'm looking forward to seeing where you go from here.
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