Feedback?

[Deleted]

I just want to know what you guys think of my Fear Itself RP

[Deleted]

I liked it, however next time i'd suggest using a color scheme when characters are talking

[Deleted]

You've done a very good job at two things: 1) telling a story and 2) playing the underdog role.

I would have liked to see you address almost being stabbed with a fork by GDY in Monroe and talk a little more on some of the other participants, but you did do a good job of building up the tournament though.

[Deleted]

Thanks for the feedback so far guys!

AJ - I've been trying to put color schemes to the dialogue but I havent figured that out yet on Wordpress. I'll play around with it more to find out.

Ernie - The forking incident slipped off my mind while writing this RP! You're right I should've talked about it more.

[Deleted]

People are always after me about using color schemes, but I'm almost completely 100% color blind and it makes it a little tough in my case,lol. I couldn't tell you the difference between red and yellow if my life depended on it.

[Chandler Scott]

Good thing your sig isn't red and yellow then? ;D

You play the underdog well, Ryan.

[Deleted]

Havent asked for feedback in awhile. I went all CD this time around but still centered around my match with Ryu Kanata. What do you guys think?

[FGA Office]

Check your PMs tomorrow for some feedback from me.

[ryukanata]

It was a great start. Hopefully, I left you time to get another out and we can build on this thing we've got going. Sorry it took me so long to get my first up, it's been a crazy week.

Good luck.

[Chris Q]

Kidd-

You do a nice job putting over the history between the two men and adding new material to make this match interesting. There were a few awkward phrases in each of your promos this week. Sometimes you switch tenses in the middle of a sentence and other times you fail to complete thoughts within a sentence. Here is one example I found:

"A cornered animal who has nowhere to run and nothing to lose will fight hard until the very last drop of blood in its body."

Until the very last drop of blood in its body does what? This sentence doesn't complete the thought you have started.

Just a few small things I noticed. Overall, entertaining to read.

[Deleted]

Havent asked for one in awhile. I think I finally got my groove back with this one. What do you guys think?

Jersey City DVD Tapings RP

[Deleted]

I thought it was good. You could really see how affected Kidd was by losing his title to Gunner Hughes. And I really liked Kidd saying he was going into his match with Drake to avenge his friends Akrista and Pat Gordon, Jr. It's also good that he recognizes what a threat Drake is, especially with Harter by his side.

[shaunsindelman]

Totally agree with Ernie. I completely saw how the loss got inside of Kidd's head and how it will clearly affect him come Sat's event...but in a good way. Like he has a new purpose in life now that everything else is lost.

[Deleted]

What do you guys think of my first one for PHE?

[shaunsindelman]

Thought it was good --- the passion was there and I truly enjoyed the beginning part where he blatantly is being sarcastic about needing Preston Blake's "assistance" against Drake.