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Seems to be the mood of the people today, and I wouldn't mind some notes oh Johnny.  I'll say off the bat I'm having a bit of trouble figuring out just how detestable I want Johnny to be this time around.  Like I feel like I should be an even bigger jackass then he's all ready being, I've barely insulted anyone.

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So, actually pretty happy with that scene, worked on it off an on through the weekend. First one where I feel like Johnny actually does come across as heel rating 4, not just tweener with an annoying personality.

[Noelle Smith]

Hi

So here is a small note / suggestion... do a little more deep research into Johnny's background. He's an abused child grown up (if you believe his story from the CC PPV). He's got a bit of a chameleon feel right now, like you're trying to find your footing with him... and the extra bit of research can help lend him an air of authenticity that will only help in the long run.

A small example - if he was really in the porn business for even a cup of coffee, there would be details about it that could enrich the CD portion of the RP. Things that while outwardly he says bored him, maybe the opposite is true and he felt used - which leads to him being more hateful in dealing with other people.

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Oct 25, 2014 7:38:06 GMT -5 Noelle Smith said:

Hi

So here is a small note / suggestion... do a little more deep research into Johnny's background. He's an abused child grown up (if you believe his story from the CC PPV). He's got a bit of a chameleon feel right now, like you're trying to find your footing with him... and the extra bit of research can help lend him an air of authenticity that will only help in the long run.

That's kinda what I was trying for with the last two scenes. Johnny has always had a hatred of his mother, but this is the first time I've tried to say why. The weird part for trying to define him is he used to be in a place where there were no faces or heels, not really, so the chameleon thing happened.

A small example - if he was really in the porn business for even a cup of coffee, there would be details about it that could enrich the CD portion of the RP. Things that while outwardly he says bored him, maybe the opposite is true and he felt used - which leads to him being more hateful in dealing with other people.

It is supposed to be true, I just haven't had a reason to bring it up organically.

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So, that should be the last of the pseudo-sympathetic Johnny background scenes. Moving forward we'll start getting into the unrepentant asshole portion of his life.