Feedback for Chaths.
May 30, 2014 16:04:37 GMT -5
Post by Stephen on May 30, 2014 16:04:37 GMT -5
Ok,
The way that I have planned Chaths' CD story has always been about his personal bouts with guilt. I never really got to get too deep into that my first run other than acknowledging the fact that something happened in Japan that he felt guilty about. When he came to FGA he was feeling guilty about ending the career of a dear friend, tag team partner, and mentor. When Johnny Blayze offered to tag with him, he saw it as a way to make up for his past sins by helping Blayze get the vengeance that he sought. He was also trying to recreate the partnership he had with Utada in Japan through Blayze. When things began spiraling out of control with The Church, he realized that this wasn't what he signed up for and dipped. Coming back, he feels guilty about letting things go too far, though he'll never admit it publicly, and his insecurities are feeding his superiority complex to the point where he feels the need to bring others down to his level to feel better about himself. He also takes out his anger in the ring with a violent and dirty moveset. That's Chaths in my mind and how I want people to come to see him in the future.
Also, I'm really trying to work on my promo work as I feel it's never been my strong point in efedding. Most of the feds I've been apart of prior to any run by Terry is that just straight talking shit about your opponent= a good promo. That really isn't the case I've observed in FGA. So any tips of what I need to tone down or add on would be much appreciated.
I tend to be an overzealous and over the top writer and I've always been told that I have a very wild imagination
But I'm really wanting to improve as an overall writer and storyteller. So any and all critique is much appreciated and will be returned in kind.
The way that I have planned Chaths' CD story has always been about his personal bouts with guilt. I never really got to get too deep into that my first run other than acknowledging the fact that something happened in Japan that he felt guilty about. When he came to FGA he was feeling guilty about ending the career of a dear friend, tag team partner, and mentor. When Johnny Blayze offered to tag with him, he saw it as a way to make up for his past sins by helping Blayze get the vengeance that he sought. He was also trying to recreate the partnership he had with Utada in Japan through Blayze. When things began spiraling out of control with The Church, he realized that this wasn't what he signed up for and dipped. Coming back, he feels guilty about letting things go too far, though he'll never admit it publicly, and his insecurities are feeding his superiority complex to the point where he feels the need to bring others down to his level to feel better about himself. He also takes out his anger in the ring with a violent and dirty moveset. That's Chaths in my mind and how I want people to come to see him in the future.
Also, I'm really trying to work on my promo work as I feel it's never been my strong point in efedding. Most of the feds I've been apart of prior to any run by Terry is that just straight talking shit about your opponent= a good promo. That really isn't the case I've observed in FGA. So any tips of what I need to tone down or add on would be much appreciated.
I tend to be an overzealous and over the top writer and I've always been told that I have a very wild imagination
But I'm really wanting to improve as an overall writer and storyteller. So any and all critique is much appreciated and will be returned in kind.