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Post by shaunsindelman on Oct 21, 2013 19:32:31 GMT -5
Oh man...can't wait to see the "psychologist" take on Psycho Johnny Blayze.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 21, 2013 23:08:52 GMT -5
That's easy: "Suggested treatment is to let him be in a bromance with Charles Manson. However, I cannot state that his life, nor his anus, will be safe."
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Post by Deleted on Oct 22, 2013 15:24:53 GMT -5
I read Dom as, more than anything else, a scared and troubled little boy. He's riddled with insecurities (and it seems, at times, feelings of unworthiness?) which he has severe trouble consciously admitting to himself. He also has absolutely no stability either externally or internally, and despite his self-possessed exterior, that terrifies him. I don't think he's an inherently bad person; I think he's a very grey, very complex person who acts bad because that way he can blame his flaws on being "evil", instead of facing up to his weaknesses. His attraction to Drake makes total sense to me - Drake is emotionally unshackled, in a way Dom wishes he could be. Drake represents validation for Dom's dark side, in that being around Drake reinforces his subconscious choice to indulge his "evil" rather than face his weakness. When Dom's away from Drake, those self-doubts start to seep back in, which means he gets even more defensive and short-tempered, which means he feels even more compelled to be with Drake... Ding! Ding! Ding! You win! “When I get to tear you apart piece by piece….”
“And I can go ahead and tear you apart, piece by piece.”- I found in a couple promos that you repeat some of the trash talking. It’s a nitpicky thing, but that’s one of the reasons we ask for feedback. I found myself catching repetition a couple times in your work. Were they in the same promo?  There are a few inconsistencies in the way Dom talks about his success. In some instances, Dom acts like there is a lot he needs to do in order to leave his mark and legacy. Other times, you act like the victories and titles you’ve already won have already established Dom’s legacy. Is he a success at this point in his career or not? I read multiple perspectives in your work. My bad, I need to write things down to keep on track sometimes lol I mean, Dom has many layers and is riddled with nagging doubts that make him doubt his worthiness sometimes... Emotion. Above all else, that’s what stands out to me about this character. Not only do you consistently include details about how every person in your writing is feeling, you change the overall tone of your writing to reflect that. I think this is your strongest trait as a writer. Everything in your RPs is always so believable because you write with such convincing emotion. Personally, this allows me to get to know your characters quickly, which is a very good thing. Thank you  And Matt, you had me laughing. |
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Post by Chris Q on Oct 22, 2013 19:10:31 GMT -5
Yeah, those lines were from the same promo. It was one of the RPs against PGJR if I remember correctly.
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Post by styg on Oct 22, 2013 20:09:58 GMT -5
Ding! Ding! Ding! You win! Yay! Sometimes I worry that read too much into things... then I worry that actually stuff like this is blindingly obvious and I'm not reading enough into things. I guess this might be more appropriate to Malcolm's character study than Dom's, but I haven't yet been able to work out for sure whether or not Drake is aware of the feedback loop that keeps Dom in thrall to him. And, by extension, whether or not he's consciously manipulating him. |
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Post by Deleted on Oct 23, 2013 1:48:10 GMT -5
Yeah, those lines were from the same promo. It was one of the RPs against PGJR if I remember correctly. Damn, I'll get my thesaurus out in the future  |
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Post by Vinny on Oct 23, 2013 10:03:53 GMT -5
I have a whole book of colorful threatening euphemisms.
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