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Post by thelion on Feb 22, 2013 21:50:20 GMT -5
I don't know what it is, but this character puts a smile on my face. LoL. Johnny Blaize is a funny guy in a sea full of people who take themselves way too seriously and like others have said, he's a nice breath of fresh air. Don't let this guy become too serious, ever, or he'll lose that magic that makes him different.
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Post by shaunsindelman on Mar 2, 2013 12:34:05 GMT -5
2 new segments up - let me know what you all think.
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Post by shaunsindelman on Mar 10, 2013 18:57:44 GMT -5
And another.
No feedback?
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Post by Deleted on Mar 11, 2013 17:51:36 GMT -5
This rp wasn't horrible.. but it felt.. rushed.
I feel like Blayze, in his RP's just isn't coming off as a face in my opinion. Not one in the traditional sense anyway.. You pointed out everything your opponent's done wrong, and swore to basically make him pay. Any decent face, builds his opponent up THEN tears him down. I don't feel like you've done that very well in this.
I'd also like to see you make a better distinction between actions and dialogue.
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Post by shaunsindelman on Mar 12, 2013 10:41:32 GMT -5
Thanks Luke.
If it felt rushed, it's probably because I wrote it at like 6am when I couldn't sleep (damn DST) and didn't see it for anything other than what it was when I wrote it. I tend to be a spontaneous RP'er rather than dwell on something for days and days.
As for him not coming off as a face, I totally see your point and will keep it in mind in the future.
Finally, I thought my distinctions were pretty clear with actions/description going in brackets and speech going in regular text. What else can I do to make it more clear to you or any other reader?
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Post by Deleted on Mar 12, 2013 19:14:09 GMT -5
It generally makes a better distinction if you use bolds or italics or colors.
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Post by shaunsindelman on Mar 12, 2013 21:19:48 GMT -5
It generally makes a better distinction if you use bolds or italics or colors. Gotcha. THAT I can do. =D |
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Post by shaunsindelman on Mar 25, 2013 14:51:55 GMT -5
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Post by shaunsindelman on Apr 18, 2013 10:18:24 GMT -5
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Post by shaunsindelman on May 22, 2013 15:32:49 GMT -5
Bump.
Any insight on my work as of late?
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Post by Jensen Banks on May 22, 2013 16:52:31 GMT -5
I like it. You've turned your guy into a pretty good heel who's building on becoming a solid one.
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Post by shaunsindelman on May 22, 2013 17:23:14 GMT -5
Thanks...like I said in the past, I find it easier to write a POS heel than some goody-goody face who was trying to impress people and hang around other faces like a lap dog.
And plus with Blayze's attitude of "army of one", it doesn't matter that the other heels still can't stand him.
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Post by Jensen Banks on May 25, 2013 11:02:42 GMT -5
Thanks...like I said in the past, I find it easier to write a POS heel than some goody-goody face who was trying to impress people and hang around other faces like a lap dog. And plus with Blayze's attitude of "army of one", it doesn't matter that the other heels still can't stand him. There's nothing wrong with being a goody two shoes face. |
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Post by shaunsindelman on May 26, 2013 15:26:56 GMT -5
There's not...just not the path for me, I guess.
Thoughts on the new CD piece? Anyone?
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Post by Alexia Brandt on May 26, 2013 21:12:57 GMT -5
I'll miss the bitter and paranoid Johnny, but with the new dynamic in the Murder saga it's probably a smart move to let the character evolve into something more self-focused, which your current narrative direction seems to be heading towards.
Obviously I'm not going to complain that you're using Alexia as a catalyst for this new direction, and it doesn't hurt that it provides me a chance to explore aspects of Alexia I haven't had a chance to toy around with, but I'm actually more interested in seeing where you take Blayze after our feud is over; there's a lot of things to explore when you play the "Harbinger" persona (as I like to call it) and I'm curious as to how Johnny will develop based on his history and character.
Just be warned, I'm not joining you on a battle station, no matter how many bothans died to tell me it's not complete.
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